The
Little girl and the wolf
By James Thurber
One afternoon a big wolf waited in a dark forest for a little girl to come along carrying a basket of food to her grandmother.
Finally a little girl did come along and she was carrying a basket of food. “Are
you carrying that basket to your grandmother?” asked the wolf. The little girl
said yes, she was. So the wolf asked her where her grandmother lived and the
little girl told him and he disappeared into the wood.
-My alternative version…The little girl knew that the wolf had bad intentions. She also realized that he was a coward, so she decided to give to grandmother a present: the wolf's smooth skin. So, when the wolf walked through
the dense forest, the little girl surprised him. The wolf was so startled that he fell to the ground unconscious. She took the opportunity and killed him, stabbing a knife in his heart.
So she rip off his beautiful skin and gave it of her grandmother.
Luz
ResponderEliminarGreat story, I love when you mix blood and stuff to innocent stories. It gives it more flavour and of course, it gets much easier to read because you want to know what happened. Though I find quite hard that that little girl had surprised the scary wolf.
Though you might want to check your writing, you need some words to get it right.
For example here:
1) "...so she decided to give to grandmother..."
I would write it like this:
"So she decided to give her grandmother"
2) "...gave it of her grandmother..."
I'd say: " Gave it TO her grandmother"
You could give more details to comprehend how did ripp off his skin! Keep it up, Luz.